Can I have some feedback on this story so far?
I have to write a sci-fi time story for english class.
It's not my best, but whatever, I have to get it in.
I just want to know if everything makes sense at this point, and if you'd keep reading.
if you want the story line ask.
Disaster
Theoretically, time travel is the idea that man will someday be able to travel through periods of time without being altered or harmed. Unfortunately, that's just theory.
It is year 2034 on the Southern Coast of California. The summer is just beginning, and the small town of Old Carlsbad is coming to life for the season. The streets are scattered with crowds of tourists and locals, and the beaches are lined with families, surfboards, and hundreds of colorful umbrellas that seem to run on infinitely. Here, time is nonexistent. The waves move in constant fluctuation, and the salty breeze leaves the refreshing notion of summer. Days roll into nights without notice, and everyone and everything has a sense of normalcy and peace. Beneath the surface of this, though, something was about to happen, and nobody saw it coming.
James Michaels wanted nothing but fame. He wanted to walk the streets and hear his name being called from every direction. He wanted his face plastered on busses, and all over the newsstands. Yet, there he was. Sitting behind his computer screen with a notebook filled with pages upon pages of calculations and figures. He knew he held the key, he just had to figure out which door it fit in to. He had been studying for years
Post edited at 3:30 pm on Nov. 20, 2008 by worddsonn